You are too hard on yourself (but so are many of us artists and writers -- for instance, the first sex-scene fic that I wrote some ten years ago is in my opinion so badly written that I just want to delete it from AO3, but it got positive comments and kudos so obviously some fen did not think it's as bad as I think it is).

Anyways, I actually really love this here piece of your art. My experience of it is that it bursts joyfully from the page with vibrant grace and cheerful light and happy motion and appealing color.